Silent sorry rivers streaming down down down,
A cruel school,
A servant girl,
No pa pa,
Why, why, why was that era so harsh?
Your sad ring has made me feel love,
Thanks little princess you are forever in my heart.
Evaluation: I think that the sense I used (feel) worked really well in my poem, and I think that when I used repitition it helped my poem to stand out a bit more. I think that next time I could add more descriptive words to explain the time it took place.